The Woman In The Window

Richard Lake: HOUSTON — Tuesday evening, it is warm. The old man mows the lawn in the twilight. Darkness has not yet arrived, but it is coming.

The old man is out of gas now, almost through. He heads toward the garage for more, which is when he sees her. He gazes.

She had been talking to him all afternoon as he mowed, which he calls sweet and which comforted him. But now, in this moment, in the waning daylight, Mary Bounds looks upon her husband from inside their home. The bedroom window frames her face like a portrait.

Charles Bounds smiles at his wife, dead now 7,447 days.

Posted by ben on 05/06/08 at 13:59 | Comments (1) | Trackbacks (0)


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Re: The Woman In The Window

Nicely done. Kept me right to the end. I like the way you circled around to the images and emotions you started with. This is another example of a story I might have turned away from had you not hooked me so well in the beginning.

I thought the use of a classic story-telling voice ..."And so it was..." worked here. Again, it helped guide me places I wasn't sure I wanted to go.

Posted by: cottaway at May 08,2008 09:03


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