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From Dan Stockman: You think the folks on Gangrey could offer a critique? I faced a lot of challenges - the story was six years old, parts of it had been previously reported elsewhere, though never here, etc. I guess I'm wondering if the mix of narrative and traditional reporting worked, or if people would have done things differently? I tried several different approaches, but this was the only one that felt right. Maybe others have ideas I didn't think of.
Here's the story: They were lining up for chow – grits, bacon and eggs, the New York Times would report – before a day of rifle practice on the nearby range.
March 20, 2002, was supposed to be another routine day of training for the 110th Military Intelligence Battalion at Fort Drum in upper New York a few weeks before shipping overseas to Afghanistan or Bosnia.
But a few hills away, things were anything but routine for C Battery of the 15th Artillery Regiment’s 2nd Battalion. The battery had been having nothing but problems since getting there the night before.
